There’s a clear and strongly communicated story. What I think would help is at 0:20, where there’s a frame that goes too quickly—I find that one distracting. Overall, the story is good, and its structure is well done. The expressions are funny and add effectively to the humor.
Fantastic work! There’s great variation in the facial expressions and camera movements.
How did you get interested in Newgrounds?
What is your process for creating animation?